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With her coat straining around her, eyes crowded with years of cold and unease, she held out her box to a passerby. Buttons flashed in the muted light, but the man scoffed as he continued past her. She did not smile, but she did not curse him. Instead, she pitied him.
She was seven when she decided to put her faith in rain clouds and the safety that the elderly lady on Oak Street offered once a week. She decided that there is no blinding light inside her, but there was still love in other people. She saw it whenever her buttons passed from her troubled fingers to theirs.
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What my mother taught meMy mother taught me forgiveness.
When the-one-who-is-not-my-father
Came home with empty hands
And a head full of excuses
To explain why
He wasn't there on my birthday or
Late on my first day of school
Or why he hadn't picked me up
When I'd waited in the hallway
With my tiny pink suitcase
In my tiny pink hand.
She invited him back in with
A warm fire blazing in her heart.
Again and again she took him back
Until she couldn't take it anymore
And he was met with a wall of ice
At the door.
But when I came home
Battered and bruised from life
She opened her arms
And forgave again.
'What my mother taught me' by AnotherNamelessOne
10/19: Wow, a DD??? THANK YOU FOR FEATURING THIS PIECE, doughboycafe!!!!
I really love this story as it reminds me of a fairytale with a girl selling matches to people. Both stories, yours and the fairytale end in a positive/negative way. In the fairytale the girl was freezing to death (negative), but was reunited with her lovely mother again (positive). Your ending shows that the girl is desolate (negative), but she feels some light and love from people buying her buttons (positive). I love those endings in stories.
Really love the atmosphere you have created by depicting the look of the girl and the goods which she sells. Also the description of the surrounding gives the story a solid background.
I did not find anything to critique here as the story is crisp and picturesque.
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD (even if it is already some time ago) and keep up that great work.
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