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Of All the Places in the Universe

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October 19, 2017
Of All the Places in the Universe by HugQueen
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She was a button girl. Thirteen and already too old to be beautiful with grimy cheekbones accented by listless, golden-gray hair. She spent her time trying to sell her collection, dozens of buttons lined neatly in a haggard box. The large one with tiny flowers etched into them, a plain navy one, and the bright pink button were her favorites. They were the ones she hoped would find a home in some little girl's cherished dress or a mother's apron.

With her coat straining around her, eyes crowded with years of cold and unease, she held out her box to a passerby. Buttons flashed in the muted light, but the man scoffed as he continued past her. She did not smile, but she did not curse him. Instead, she pitied him.

She was seven when she decided to put her faith in rain clouds and the safety that the elderly lady on Oak Street offered once a week. She decided that there is no blinding light inside her, but there was still love in other people. She saw it whenever her buttons passed from her troubled fingers to theirs.
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Malintra-Shadowmoon's avatar

I really love this story as it reminds me of a fairytale with a girl selling matches to people. Both stories, yours and the fairytale end in a positive/negative way. In the fairytale the girl was freezing to death (negative), but was reunited with her lovely mother again (positive). Your ending shows that the girl is desolate (negative), but she feels some light and love from people buying her buttons (positive). I love those endings in stories.

Really love the atmosphere you have created by depicting the look of the girl and the goods which she sells. Also the description of the surrounding gives the story a solid background.

I did not find anything to critique here as the story is crisp and picturesque.

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD (even if it is already some time ago) and keep up that great work.


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